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No use of apostrophes, therefore instantly terrible. Jokes aside, here's some suggestions:
-on the sentence >Which is, dummyed replace the comma with an elipsis
-for cumsock, we need an explanation on how he knows what an anime girl is, but I assume it's on the rest of the script
-I also thing the dialogue could be less stiff, maybe something like >HMMMM, A real life anime girl! Time to knock my sock off! Something like that, and he asks if she wanna fuck afterwards instead of before
-Missing commas on 'Hey pretty lady' and '[...]to be, which is... dummyed.'
Otherwise it's kinda difficult to critique without knowing the rest of the plot and pacing, I assume we are the point of the story where the other kids show their experiments. This is the perfect opportunity for gags and to showcase the abilities and character of the cumsock and what makes it special. Maybe he ends up destroying all the other experiment critters and ends up getting the other kids angry. Creating conflict and showcasing his antagonist role.
 
No use of apostrophes, therefore instantly terrible. Jokes aside, here's some suggestions:
-on the sentence >Which is, dummyed replace the comma with an elipsis
-for cumsock, we need an explanation on how he knows what an anime girl is, but I assume it's on the rest of the script
-I also thing the dialogue could be less stiff, maybe something like >HMMMM, A real life anime girl! Time to knock my sock off! Something like that, and he asks if she wanna fuck afterwards instead of before
-Missing commas on 'Hey pretty lady' and '[...]to be, which is... dummyed.'
Otherwise it's kinda difficult to critique without knowing the rest of the plot and pacing, I assume we are the point of the story where the other kids show their experiments. This is the perfect opportunity for gags and to showcase the abilities and character of the cumsock and what makes it special. Maybe he ends up destroying all the other experiment critters and ends up getting the other kids angry. Creating conflict and showcasing his antagonist role.
Didn't read, stop embarrassing yourself.
 
>No use of apostrophes, therefore instantly terrible. Jokes aside, here's some suggestions:
-on the sentence >Which is, dummyed replace the comma with an elipsis
-for cumsock, we need an explanation on how he knows what an anime girl is, but I assume it's on the rest of the script
-I also thing the dialogue could be less stiff, maybe something like >HMMMM, A real life anime girl! Time to knock my sock off! Something like that, and he asks if she wanna fuck afterwards instead of before
-Missing commas on 'Hey pretty lady' and '[...]to be, which is... dummyed.'
Otherwise it's kinda difficult to critique without knowing the rest of the plot and pacing, I assume we are the point of the story where the other kids show their experiments. This is the perfect opportunity for gags and to showcase the abilities and character of the cumsock and what makes it special. Maybe he ends up destroying all the other experiment critters and ends up getting the other kids angry. Creating conflict and showcasing his antagonist role.
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>No use of apostrophes, therefore instantly terrible. Jokes aside, here's some suggestions:
-on the sentence >Which is, dummyed replace the comma with an elipsis
-for cumsock, we need an explanation on how he knows what an anime girl is, but I assume it's on the rest of the script
-I also thing the dialogue could be less stiff, maybe something like >HMMMM, A real life anime girl! Time to knock my sock off! Something like that, and he asks if she wanna fuck afterwards instead of before
-Missing commas on 'Hey pretty lady' and '[...]to be, which is... dummyed.'
Otherwise it's kinda difficult to critique without knowing the rest of the plot and pacing, I assume we are the point of the story where the other kids show their experiments. This is the perfect opportunity for gags and to showcase the abilities and character of the cumsock and what makes it special. Maybe he ends up destroying all the other experiment critters and ends up getting the other kids angry. Creating conflict and showcasing his antagonist role.
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Nuh huh. It's you all 30 year old virgins who got her creeped out cause you keep sexualizing me and her when neither of us have showed any flirty behavior outside of your own twisted fantasies
God-tier projection coming from the Brapzilian simp dummy.
 
>No use of apostrophes, therefore instantly terrible. Jokes aside, here's some suggestions:
-on the sentence >Which is, dummyed replace the comma with an elipsis
-for cumsock, we need an explanation on how he knows what an anime girl is, but I assume it's on the rest of the script
-I also thing the dialogue could be less stiff, maybe something like >HMMMM, A real life anime girl! Time to knock my sock off! Something like that, and he asks if she wanna fuck afterwards instead of before
-Missing commas on 'Hey pretty lady' and '[...]to be, which is... dummyed.'
Otherwise it's kinda difficult to critique without knowing the rest of the plot and pacing, I assume we are the point of the story where the other kids show their experiments. This is the perfect opportunity for gags and to showcase the abilities and character of the cumsock and what makes it special. Maybe he ends up destroying all the other experiment critters and ends up getting the other kids angry. Creating conflict and showcasing his antagonist role.
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>No use of apostrophes, therefore instantly terrible. Jokes aside, here's some suggestions:
-on the sentence >Which is, dummyed replace the comma with an elipsis
-for cumsock, we need an explanation on how he knows what an anime girl is, but I assume it's on the rest of the script
-I also thing the dialogue could be less stiff, maybe something like >HMMMM, A real life anime girl! Time to knock my sock off! Something like that, and he asks if she wanna fuck afterwards instead of before
-Missing commas on 'Hey pretty lady' and '[...]to be, which is... dummyed.'
Otherwise it's kinda difficult to critique without knowing the rest of the plot and pacing, I assume we are the point of the story where the other kids show their experiments. This is the perfect opportunity for gags and to showcase the abilities and character of the cumsock and what makes it special. Maybe he ends up destroying all the other experiment critters and ends up getting the other kids angry. Creating conflict and showcasing his antagonist role.
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